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The writer’s toolkit: Eavesdropping for dialogue

May 4, 2010 by Alan Rinzler

Listening in on random conversations — okay, blatant eavesdropping — is a time-honored technique for writers fine-tuning their ear and seeking authentic feelings with distinctive ways of expressing them.

Norman Mailer did it

If you practice eavesdropping, you’re in good company. Norman Mailer used to whip out a little spiral-bound notebook at parties and write down something someone had said. And he wasn’t subtle. It could happen in the middle of a conversation. I had that disconcerting experience with him more than once.

A cautionary note from Tom Robbins

My old friend, author Tom Robbins, wrote me on this subject the other day. “There was a time in my early so-called career when I would snare in my mental net witty lines that I overheard at parties or gallery openings, inserting them at appropriate places in my manuscripts — only to discover later, much to my embarrassment, that the line had not been original with the speaker but rather lifted verbatim from some television comedy show. (It takes a thief to catch a thief?)

I aborted that practice decades ago. But years later, I rode city buses in New Orleans to get a feel for the conversations of the black riders. It was their manner of speech rather than exact expressions that I was after, and this experiment proved quite helpful in assuring that the dialogue in Jitterbug Perfume was authentic.”

As Tom’s editor on Jitterbug, I can vouch for the masterful dialogue he created for his fabulous characters, in particular the sly and conniving Pan, the Goat God, who appears memorably in this novel.  Here’s a snapshot of what it was like, incidentally, to work with Tom on the book.

“If you die, can I have your stuff?”

Veteran author Charlie Haas told me “I do pay attention to what people are saying. I think it’s a good writing technique because it builds up one’s ear for dialogue and vernacular.” This memorable line overheard at a high-speed kite buggy race in the Nevada desert made its way word-for-word into his most recent novel, The Enthusiast: “If you die, can I have your stuff?”

Favorite haunts for eavesdropping

An informal survey of some author friends revealed these favorite haunts for best eavesdropping:

• “My favorite spot to people watch is a bar. People tend to speak a little louder and with lower inhibitions after they have had a drink or two.”

• “Some of the best things I’ve overheard were in the shower at the gym.”

• “It’s not very hard to eavesdrop these days. People talk on their cell phones so loud the whole world can hear their conversation. I’m always listening, not so much for anything specific, but to the entire orchestration.”

• “I just sit in a café, have my coffee and listen in on conversations around me. I write down what I’m hearing in a notebook and no one’s the wiser.”

• “I hear inspiration in everyday conversations and get ideas for my writing simply by listening to other people talk about their lives. The little gems of expression I pick up don’t always fit into the story I’m working on, so they stay in my notebook, waiting, until I think of ways to build context around them. But sometimes a line I’ve overheard can give me a starting point for a whole new story.”

Delicious fun

Try it yourself. It can be delicious fun. Yesterday I overheard a young woman on the sidewalk telling her friend goodbye. “I’m going home now to take a shower because I’m dirty,” she said. “I’m a dirty dirty girl.”

Hmmm. A writer could probably use that line.

A few tips

1. Write down the exact words whenever possible. That means always carrying a pen and paper or some other device for taking notes, like texting into a phone or typing on a laptop.

2. Try to get a glimpse of the speaker’s body language or facial expression that might reveal the true meaning between the lines.

3. Don’t throw anything away. What you’ve overheard may not be of immediate use to you but at some point in the future you may be working on something that could use precisely this line or something like it.

Have some fun with this. That’s why you write, right? People sure are interesting.

What have you overheard lately?

 

Filed Under: Craft of Writing, The writer's toolkit

Comments

  1. Paulo Campos says

    May 12, 2010 at 9:33 am

    Bars have been a great resource for me.

    Once, two stools down from me at a bar:
    Patron 1: Say, do you live on 84 Street. Between 2nd and 3rd Ave, yeah?
    Patron 2: I do, indeed.
    Patron 1: I thought so. On Jimmy Donnally’s block, yeah?
    Patron 2 (slaps his drink down & staggers off his bar stool): THEN YOU’RE A F—ING TRAITOR!

    Another: I agree. The iPhone or iPod (discrete attachable microphones aren’t too expensive) are great and innocuous. My brother once set his iPhone down on the table and captured an intense political argument during a family dinner. We’re both writers and have (discretely) used swatches of what was said in our work.

  2. Kelly Wittmann says

    May 11, 2010 at 2:43 pm

    What a fun post! I’ll definitely be linking.

  3. Chrissa says

    May 8, 2010 at 7:35 pm

    I love eavesdropping. I work in a department/discount store, and the types of things people say always surprises me. It’s quite a crowded place, but even when it’s just me and a pair of customers in an aisle, they assume I can’t or won’t listen.

    Today I heard a little girl and her mother discussing what the daughter would buy with the eleven dollars she had in her purse.

    Girl: “I want this cookbook. THIS one, the italian one.”

    Mother: “Why in the world would you want a dumb old cookbook?”

    Girl: “Cuz I’m gonna be a chef. An Italian chef. In Paris.”

    Thank god I had my notebook for that one.

  4. nathan moya says

    May 8, 2010 at 3:50 pm

    It’s difficult, but try eavesdropping at the grocery store. I suppose it makes you look like you’re following people…but what they hey, you get to hear some very funny conversation about toilet paper, cookies, and frozen food. And listening to people get mad about the deli not having the right sandwich meat is kind of funny–especially when the person working responds with really sarcastic remarks.

    Have fun
    NM

  5. Rich Dailey says

    May 6, 2010 at 8:43 am

    My favorite spot: parked close to the entrance of a Walmart, preferably near the handicapped parking.
    RD

  6. Lourdes says

    May 6, 2010 at 6:43 am

    I love this idea! Will start eavesdropping immediately…

  7. Carolyn Jewel says

    May 5, 2010 at 8:55 am

    The iPhone has a couple of apps that let you do recordings. So if you happen to be out without your notebook and pen, you could simply repeat the dialogue into the phone.

    Great advice about simply listening to who is saying what. I also like to observe how things are said — noting how body language or tone of voice changes the meaning of the words.

  8. Wendy Sullivan says

    May 4, 2010 at 2:24 pm

    Eavesdropping is the aural answer to people watching. I really oughta do it more.

    Wendy

  9. Michelle says

    May 4, 2010 at 1:59 pm

    My favorite place to eavesdrop and people watch is the airport. People are tired and stressed, so they’re way off guard. It’s also a good place to observe the relationships between people: family members, coworkers, etc.

    My favorite overheard story of late was a woman in a Starbucks on the phone. She said, “Remember when I busted my eardrum when I got that chopstick stuck in my ear?” I really wanted to ask how exactly that happened!

  10. Terry Odell says

    May 4, 2010 at 12:31 pm

    My aunt tells the story of my cousin saying to her, “When you’re dead, can I have that?”

    We’ve just moved to a totally different part of the country. We were having coffee at a small coffee shop, populated, apparently, by regulars. One man came in, and the server greeted him with, “How’s the calf-birthing going?”

  11. Marisa Birns says

    May 4, 2010 at 12:29 pm

    Oh, eavesdropping is one of my favorite things to do! I do carry a small notebook and pen whenever I go out because experience has shown that I will forget what I heard the minute I step in the door at home.

    No matter where I am, a bank, cafe, restaurant, airport, train station, etc. there’s always something interesting/wonderful/surprising to hear.

    And I find that when people comment on my short stories, they like the dialogue.

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